No.....
First thing I have to say is......Learn how to draw.Don't just try to copy that "Japanese Look" you see on the T.V. You failed,and failed miserably. Second of all, The plot is total shit. I understand you had to have the theme of hope in it, but that isn't the way to approach it. That just comes across cheesy, and is way too predictable. Come back after studying proper storytelling and art techniques.....